The line graph below shows the population size, birth rate and the death rate of England and Wales from 1700 to 2000. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the population size, birth rate and the death rate of England and Wales from 1700 to 2000. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph shows the
population
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size
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,
birth
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rate
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, and
the
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apply
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death
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rate
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of
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in
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England and Wales from 1700 to 2000.
Population
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size
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and birthrate
has
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have
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seen an
increase
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,
whereas
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death
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the death
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rate
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has experienced the opposite. Apart from a slight dip during 1750-1800, the
population
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size
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in England and Wales experienced significant growth, from around less than 5 million in 1750 to 50 million in 2000. It increased the most between the years of 1850 and 1950, more than quadrupling its
size
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.
Birth
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rate
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,
however
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, has not seen
such
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increase
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an increase
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, experiencing both growth, during 1700-1750 and 1950-2000, and
decline
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a decline
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, in 1800-1950. Ultimately,
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birth
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the birth
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rate
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increased from 60,000 in 1700 to around 70,000 in 2000.
Lastly
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,
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death
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the death
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rate
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only
experience
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experiences
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an
increase
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during 1700-1750. Ever since
then
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, the
death
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rate
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has seen
steady
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a steady
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decline, eventually leveling off in 1950 with a decrease from 50 thousand in 1700 to 40 thousand in 2000. In conclusion, only
population
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size
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has seen a steep
increase
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, increasing
almost
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50 million.
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the
birth
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rate
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has only seen slight growth with only a 15%
increase
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.
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, the
death
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rate
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has decreased
20
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% from its initial data in 1700.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 92%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, size, birth, rate, death, increase with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic changes
  • population growth
  • birth rate
  • death rate
  • gradual increase
  • notable decline
  • Industrial Revolution
  • public health improvements
  • significant rise
  • wartime periods
  • substantial growth
  • natural decrease in mortality
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