The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in

England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000

and 2010.
The pie charts
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illustrate
the percentages of British pupils at a university in England who were able to speak other languages
in addition
to English, in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
, three major languages
involving
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French, German, and Spanish
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shown in the graphs. What stands out from the charts is that Spanish was the most trending second language among the others in
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years. If we look at the details, one-fifth of the students in 2000 used to know no other language than English.
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Subsequently
, the
number
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saw a considerable decrease to one-tenth by 2010.
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the importance of being bilingual. The
number
of German speakers was
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exactly
the same in both years.
Although
Spanish was the most popular one, it experienced a 5% decrease in the
number
of pupils from 2000 to 2010. The
number
of
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language
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speakers
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were nearly the same in 2000 and 2010 with 15% and 20% respectively.
In addition
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, more students tended to speak French in 2010 than
2000
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.
Finally
, the proportion of those who speak two other languages saw a mild increase to 15% in 2010.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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