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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reportion the main features, and make comparions where relevant.

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The pie charts illustrate the proportions of British
students
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 at a university in England who were able to speak different languages rather than English in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, Spanish was widely used by
students
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 from both years given.
Secondly
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, no other
language
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 users were significant in the first year
whereas
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, German only was the lowest
language
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 used for speaking.
However
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, in 2000, 30% of
students
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 were able to speak in Spanish, which
was
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increased in 2010, around 35% and 20% of
students
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 had no other
language
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 to use than English.
Thereafter
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, decreased half of
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 proportion and remained 10% in 2010.
While
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,
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 French and other
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language
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used
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were used
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15
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by 15
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% of
students
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 in the first year and (20% - 10% respectively) in the
last
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 year.
Moreover
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, the lowest
language
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 used in both years was German, approximately 10% in 2000 and 2010.
On the other hand
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, two other
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user
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users
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 were 10% in 2000 and gradually increased
5
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to 5
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% which was
total
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a total
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15
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of 15
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% in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportions" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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