The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reportion the main features, and make comparions where relevant.

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The pie charts illustrate the proportions of British

students

at a university in England who were able to speak different languages rather than English in 2000 and 2010.

Overall

, Spanish was widely used by

students

from both years given.

Secondly

, no other

language

users were significant in the first year

whereas

, German only was the lowest

language

used for speaking.

However

, in 2000, 30% of

students

were able to speak in Spanish, which

was

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increased in 2010, around 35% and 20% of

students

had no other

language

to use than English.

Thereafter

, decreased half of

it's

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its

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proportion and remained 10% in 2010.

While

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French and other

language

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languages

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used

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were used

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by 15

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% of

students

in the first year and (20% - 10% respectively) in the

last

year.

Moreover

, the lowest

language

used in both years was German, approximately 10% in 2000 and 2010.

On the other hand

, two other

language

user

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users

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were 10% in 2000 and gradually increased

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to 5

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% which was

total

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a total

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of 15

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% in 2010.

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