The graph shows the percentage of women working in 6 countries in 1960, 1970 and 1980. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting on th e main features and make comparisons where relevant
The provided bar chart depicts how many hours women
works
in 6 different countries ; UK , USA , Canada , Japan and Germany in the years 1970 and 2005.
Change the verb form
work
Overall
, it is evident that In 2005 women worked more hours particularly those in Canada. However
, only Japan showed small
proportion of changes.
Correct article usage
a small
To begin
, In the United Kingdom percentage
of female workers was Correct article usage
the percentage
at
35% in 1970 in comparison with 2005 Change preposition
apply
that
touched the vertex at 60%. Moving to the USA at 40% in 1970 and almost 60% in the year 2005.Correct pronoun usage
which
Conversely
, the most significant figure was at
Canada Change preposition
in
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
remain
unchanged during all these years from 60% to 60% , respectively.Wrong verb form
remained
Thereafter
in Japan
women's working hours Add a comma
Japan,
was
the Change the verb form
were
most smaller
proportion accounting Correct word choice
smallest
20
% and Change preposition
for 20
then
by 2005 it saw an improvement at
40%.The figure for Germany almost saw the same proportion with 50% in 1970 and more Change preposition
to
then
half in 2005.Replace the word
than
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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