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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

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The table above
depict
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 the number of migrant workers temporarily in four different countries between
years
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the years
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 2003 and 2006.
Overall
, it can be seen that the USA was consistently
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a country that has
most
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the most
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 migrant workers among other countries. Meanwhile, New
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Zealand
 was the
least
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last
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 country that
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 migrant workers. In 2003, Australia
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 as many as 152.000 migrant staff.
Then
, sharply jumped to 219.000.
Furthermore
, the average was 10.7 migrant staff per 1000 people in 2006.
Besides
 that, the total number of migrant staff in New Zealand was around 65.000. After that, slightly increased to 87.000. The average was about 21.1.
Moreover
, the United Kingdom started with 137.000 migrant
employee
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. Afterwards, dramatically soared to 266.000. Per 1000 people in 2006, there was 4.4 migrant
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employees
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. Later, in 2003, the United States
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 577.000 migrant
employee
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employees
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while
 the number constantly surged to 678.000. Not only that
,
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 but
also
 the average was 2.3
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temporary migrant workers
  • trends
  • absolute numbers
  • per 1,000 people
  • growth rate
  • per capita
  • labor markets
  • economies
  • significant
  • imply
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