Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opi

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Nowadays,
university
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education has become a topic of considerable debate. Some people argue that
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student
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should be restricted to
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study
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a few useful
subjects
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in the future
such
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as science or technology,
while
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others think that
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student
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students
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should have
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freedom to choose what they want to
study
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. I think that the
students
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should have a free choice to select any
subjects
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that they want to learn in the
university
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.  The proposal of studying limited
subjects
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in the
university
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has its own merits. People believe that learning
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subjects
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gives more job opportunities after graduation.
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is why people
more
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are more
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incline
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to hold
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view. As an example, when considering the Australian job market, most of the
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high-paying
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occupations
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as doctors, engineers,
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and IT
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analysis
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analysts
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are based on science or technology streams and most of the research data revealed
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the
diffrence
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difference
between studying these
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and history or art
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.  Others disagree and say it is a human right that
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student
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students
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should have
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the opportunity
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to
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or change
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subjects
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. They believe that if a
student
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is not good at a subject but the authorities force him to
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, it can
cause
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detrimental effects on his studies.
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, some universities make
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it compulsory
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to
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history but most of the
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do not attend the classes and ultimately they fail the subject.
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is a huge waste of money and time
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both
students
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and the staff.
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,
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student
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students
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should have
a
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the
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freedom to
study
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anything they prefer.  In conclusion, both views have their own merits but I believe
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university
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students
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should have more freedom of choice to select which subject they want to
study
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in
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at
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the
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apply
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univeristy
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university
because
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studying unfavour
subjects
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lead
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leads
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them unsuccessful in their academic
jurney
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journey
.
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introduction conclusion
Your introduction clearly presents both views and your opinion, setting a focused scope for the discussion.
task achievement
The essay addresses the task by presenting balanced viewpoints and offering a personal stance.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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