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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The six pie
chart
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charts
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 illustrate the information about
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the used
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used
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use
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 of
water
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 for three different purposes in the six different
area
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areas
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 in the world.
Overall
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,it is clear from the chart ,
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that agricultural
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agricultural
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agriculture
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 had a large amount of
water
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 .
In
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addition
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addition,
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 the industrial used had the majority rate in Europe and North
America
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.whaile
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while
 the domestic used had
a
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the
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 least amount of
water
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.
According to
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 the charts ,central
Asia
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 ,Africa, South
east
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East
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Asia
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 and South
America
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 accounted for 88%,84%,81% and 71% in the use of
water
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in
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for
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 agricultural
purpose
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purposes
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 .whaile it is least in both Europe 32% and North
America
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 39%.Industrial
used
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use
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 had
a
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the
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least
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lowest
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precent
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percentage
 in central
Asia
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 it is about 5%
wheares
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whereas
where
 it had
a
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the
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 majority used in Europe 53% and North
America
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 48%.
In
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other
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the other
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 hand domestic used in South East
Asia
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 and in
the
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apply
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Central
Asia
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 Show the same
precent it
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percentage
 is both 7%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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