IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

The line chart shows global population trends as a percentage from 1950 to 2040. To summarize information by selecting key characteristics and compiling a report and, if necessary, make a comparison.

The line chart shows global population trends as a percentage from 1950 to 2040. To summarize information by selecting key characteristics and compiling a report and, if necessary, make a comparison.
#line #population #trends #percentage #information #characteristics #report #comparison
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The image given above depicts two line graphs. The first one gives information about the historical trend and
pridictions
Correct your spelling
predictions
 about variations in proportions of world populations both in
cities
Use synonyms
 and villages
spaning
Correct your spelling
spanning
show examples
 from 1950 to 2040.
In addition
Linking Words
, the second one depicts the changes
of
Change preposition
in
show examples
 the global
population
Use synonyms
 in the different
age
Use synonyms
 groups for the same period.
To begin
Linking Words
 with, people have tended to live more in urban
area
Fix the agreement mistake
areas
show examples
. As it is observable, the
population
Use synonyms
 of
cities
Use synonyms
 has increased gradually, constituting one-fourth of the total
population
Use synonyms
 by the 2020s.
Moreover
Linking Words
, it is expected that with a more positive
gradiant
Correct your spelling
gradient
, it will rise to approximately 40%.
However
Linking Words
, the rural
population
Use synonyms
 was significantly less than those settled in the
cities
Use synonyms
. Starting
nearly
Change preposition
at nearly
show examples
 under five
Use synonyms
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
, it
had
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
experienced negligible fluctuations for three successive decades before it
has
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
increased slowly and trivially for the rest of the examined years. The forecast shows that it might keep its trend and stop at under ten
Use synonyms
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
at
Change preposition
in
show examples
 the
last
Linking Words
 year. Now turning our attention to the other graph, the middle
age
Use synonyms
 group, between 15 and 65, has had the most remarkable increase
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
among all
age
Use synonyms
 categories. with over 5
Use synonyms
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
 in 1950, it has been
steadlly
Correct your spelling
steadily
steady
 rising to make nearly
on-third
Correct your spelling
one-third
show examples
 of the world
population
Use synonyms
 by the
precent
Correct your spelling
present
per cent
 time.
Although
Linking Words
, it may
growth
Replace the word
grow
show examples
with
Change preposition
at
show examples
slower
Add an article
a slower
the slower
show examples
 pace, and
probabily
Correct your spelling
probably
 stop at 35
Use synonyms
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
 in 2040. The trends for two other
age
Use synonyms
 groups,
olderlys
Correct your spelling
older
 and youngsters, are
simillar
Correct your spelling
similar
 to the rural
population
Use synonyms
's one; commencing with under 5
Use synonyms
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
, and both having a
notebly
Correct your spelling
notably
noticeably
 correlated
curvs
Correct your spelling
curves
curve
, they will reach over 5
Use synonyms
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
 in the
last
Linking Words
 decade.
Overall
Linking Words
, More people have settled and will reside in
cities
Use synonyms
 and metropolitans, and individuals
with
Change preposition
aged
show examples
age
Use synonyms
 between 15 and 65 will have the
greates
Correct your spelling
greatest
population
Use synonyms
 in urban areas.
Submitted by faraisam33 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
▼
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, population, age, percent with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "depicts" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: