The graph below shows the percentage of unemployed people aged between 15 and 24 in five European countries in 2005, compared with the overall percentage of unemployment in those countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

The graph below shows the percentage of unemployed people aged between 15 and 24 in five European countries in 2005, compared with the overall percentage of unemployment in those countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of
unemployment
rate in Poland, Italy, Hungary, Germany and
Denmark
in 2005.
Overall
, the highest number of unemployed people under 24
years
old and
overall
unemployment
were both in Poland,
while
Italy ranked in the second position for
unemployment
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rate of individuals 15-24
years
old.
However
,
Denmark
was the country with the lowest rate for both categories. Regarding
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individuals aged 15-24
years
old, Poland experienced the greatest number of
unemployement
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unemployment
at approximately 35%, which
slightly
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different compared to Italy, which recorded around 28% as
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second place.
In addition
, Hungary and Germany had a similar percentage of jobless people under 24
years
old around
at
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22 and 23%.
In contrast
, the percentage of jobless people in
Denmark
was the lowest number at 12% compared to all countries. In
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of
overall
unemployed
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,
Denmark
also
experienced the least proportion of
unemployment
at only 9%, which was followed by Hungary and Italy in second and third place.
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