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The graph below shows the percentage of unemployed people aged between 15 and 24 in five European countries in 2005, compared with the overall percentage of unemployment in those countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

The graph below shows the percentage of unemployed people aged between 15 and 24 in five European countries in 2005, compared with the overall percentage of unemployment in those countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of
unemployment
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 rate in Poland, Italy, Hungary, Germany and
Denmark
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 in 2005.
Overall
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, the highest number of unemployed people under 24
years
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 old and
overall
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unemployment
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 were both in Poland,
while
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 Italy ranked in the second position for
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unemployment
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an unemployment
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 rate of individuals 15-24
years
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 old.
However
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,
Denmark
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 was the country with the lowest rate for both categories. Regarding
to
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individuals aged 15-24
years
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 old, Poland experienced the greatest number of
unemployement
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unemployment
 at approximately 35%, which
slightly
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 different compared to Italy, which recorded around 28% as
a
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second place.
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, Hungary and Germany had a similar percentage of jobless people under 24
years
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 old around
at
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22 and 23%.
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, the percentage of jobless people in
Denmark
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 was the lowest number at 12% compared to all countries. In
term
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 of
overall
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unemployed
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unemployment
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,
Denmark
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also
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 experienced the least proportion of
unemployment
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 at only 9%, which was followed by Hungary and Italy in second and third place.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, denmark, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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