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You have made a reservation at a hotel for a business trip for you and your colleagues. However, you need to make some changes to your booking. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter: give details of your current booking explain what changes you need to make and why ask the manager to make some special arrangements for your business meetings

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Dear sir / madam A week before in your hotel which is well reputed by the name of Pearl Continental
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 I made a reservation on 1 st of November for my business meeting in your main hall.The time which you assigned me was 11 am till 2 pm and with
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 lunch. I am writing
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 letter to you because there are
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 minor changes which I desire to include in my
buisness
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business
 meeting. There is a change of guest list and I will ask my manager to email it to you as soon as possible. Most of my colleagues are allergic to soup and I prefer them to be replaced by
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prwans
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. I will be really grateful if you can
arrange
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 some special arrangements for my business meeting because every individual attending
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 meeting must be satisfied. If you don't mind can I suggest you
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arrange a cake and it will be so nice of you Thanks Yours faithful Dr Umar
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coherence cohesion
Consider reordering the content to follow a clearer structure, such as introducing yourself and your original booking, then explaining the changes and special arrangements.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea to improve clarity.
task achievement
Use a more formal tone for a business letter, avoiding informal language like 'so nice of you'.
task achievement
The letter successfully addresses all parts of the task, including current booking details, desired changes, and special arrangements.
coherence cohesion
Polite closing with 'Thanks' and 'Yours faithful,' shows good use of appropriate salutations.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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