The chart shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart above depicts the various levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion between males and females in 1999.
Overall
, it can be seen that females were only dominating in two qualifications while
the rest was dominating
by males.
Change the form of the verb
dominated
First,
there were
a big gap in skilled vocational Change the verb form
was
diploma
between Fix the agreement mistake
diplomas
men
and women
. The percentage of women
just
about 10 Add a missing verb
was just
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
while
the men
were 80 per cent
. Furthermore
, in undergraduate diploma
, Fix the agreement mistake
diplomas
women
has
a high percentage, which was 70 per Change the verb form
have
cent
. On the other hand
, men
just around 35 per cent
. Moreover
, in bachelor's
degree, the gap was not too far. Correct article usage
the bachelor's
Women
and men
had percentage
as many as 50 per Fix the agreement mistake
percentages
cent
and 45 per cent
, respectively.
Besides
that, the average of females who took postgraduate
diploma was 30 per Correct article usage
a postgraduate
cent
. Meanwhile, the males
was extremely higher to 70 per Correct quantifier usage
number of males
cent
. Last
, the girls were approximately 40 per cent
who took masters
Change noun form
master's
degree
. Fix the agreement mistake
degrees
On the contrary
, the boys were 60 per cent
.Submitted by wishmeluck on
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