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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. You should write at least 150 words.
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The line graph demonstrates the number of goods delivered to the UK through road, water,rail and pipelines between 1974 and 2002
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 the most transportation used to deliver goods was through roads within approximately 28 years period,
while
 the
least
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last
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 method for transportation was via Pipelines in the same period from 1974 until 2002. Around 70
million
tonnes
transferred
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were transferred
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 to
UK
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 in 1974 through Road, with a minimal fluctuation for about 5 years approximately from 1977 to 1982.A gradual increase happened from around 70
million
tonnes
 to 80
million
tonnes
 in 1990. In 2002, the number of
tonnes
 transported by road was about 90
million
tonnes
 which shows the highest number of
tonnes
 ever transferred. In comparison, the Pipeline was the least transporting
tonnes
 from 1974 to 2002. Pipelines transported approximately 7000
tonnes
 in 1975, with a gradual rise until 1982. In conclusion, the most effective way of transporting
tonnes
 to the UK is through roads
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