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The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line chart illustrates the rate of unemployment in 3 geographical regions, between 1993 and 2007.
Overall
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, during the given 14-year
period
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,unemployment decreased in the United Kingdom and EU,
whereas
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 in
Japan
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 it increased.
However
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,
Japan
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 had the lowest percentage of unemployed people throughout the given
period
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. In 1993, 11% of the population in England, Wales, Scotland and Northern Ireland were not working.
This
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 figure reduced sharply over the next eight years to almost 5%, by 2001,
then
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 remained relatively stable to end the
period
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 at around 6%. Compared to that, in 1993, unemployment was at 9% in the rest of Europe.
Initially
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, it rose to 11% by 1997, becoming the highest among all the three areas, and
then
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 declined steadily over the next decade to just under 8% by 2007.
On the other hand
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,
Japan
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 with only 2% of people being unemployed in 1993, were at the bottom .
Japan
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's rate doubled in the next 14 years to end the
period
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 at 4%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, japan with synonyms.
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