Many universities graduates cannot find a job in their chosen profession what factors may have caused this situation and what in your opinion should be care about it?

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plays an
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role in everyone's life their importance cannot be turned a blind eye to. The majority of
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graduates are unable to get
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in
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society in their chosen profession. So it is irrefutable to say that there are
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era is a competitive era, students are unable to get their
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because of
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marks in their academics.
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companies check qualifications and general
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so that they can analyze
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we are capable
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or not. History reveals that, in developing countries like Canada where people check our
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in language
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do not accept
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kind of candidate in their company.
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my opinion, it is the duty of universities they should provide better
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courses
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so that students can get
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in
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society.
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, companies should not only check their academic marks
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focus on their practical skills. To recapitulate, it cannot be denied that
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problem is very well. It will stemmed out with the joint and collaborative efforts of companies and university tutors .
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