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The given line graph illustrates the production of three forest industry products (pulp, timber and paper) from the year 1980 to 2000.

The given line graph illustrates the production of three forest industry products (pulp, timber and paper) from the year 1980 to 2000.
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The given line graph illustrates the
production
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 of three forest industry products (
pulp
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,
timber
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 and
paper
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) from the
year
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 1980 to 2000.
Overall
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,
all the
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forest
productions
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production
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 increased throughout the period. In terms of
timber
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, the
production
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 experienced a sharp
increase
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. In terms of
pulp
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, the
production
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 experienced a sharp decrease from the period 1980 to 1985.
Moreover
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,
paper
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,
on the other hand
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, steadily increased throughout the period. In 1980, the
production
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 of
timber
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 was 5
million
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tones
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tonnes
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, and it showed a sharp
increase
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 and reached
at
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10
million
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tonnes
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 in the
year
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of
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1985.
However
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,
timber
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production
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 showed a slight decrease in the
year
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 1987 and reached
at
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8
million
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tonnes
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. Meanwhile, the
production
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 of
pulp
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 was around 6
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 in the
year
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 1980, and in 1983, it experienced a fall, which was 2.5
million
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tonnes
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. After that, in 1985, the
pulp
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production
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 increased by around 6.5
million
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tonnes
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.
Likewise
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, from the
year
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 1985 to 2000 the
production
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 of
pulp
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 showed a steady
increase
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 and reached
at
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9
million
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tonnes
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.
Moreover
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,
paper
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producion
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production
 showed a gradual
increase
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 from the
year
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 1980 to 1995, which reached 4
million
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tonnes
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 to around 8.4
million
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tonnes
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.
Furthermore
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, from 1997 to 2000,
paper
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production
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 experienced a sharp
increase
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 and reached
at
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12
million
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tonnes
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, pulp, timber, paper, year, increase, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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