You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam

#room #college #student #arrangement #work #accommodation #officer #situation #addresses #sir #madam

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Dear Sir/Madam, Hope

this

letter finds you well. I am writing

this

letter to register my complaint regarding the

accomodation

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accommodation

recieved

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received

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room

in a college. My name is Navdeep

bajaj

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and I live in

room

number 22a at our hostel. As

this

room

is shared by my

roomate

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roommate

too.As my roommate has many friends in the hostel I found difficulty in sleeping and studying

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room

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the room

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because

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whole

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day his friends

are coming

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and

going

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fro

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this

, as I am

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an introvert

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introvert

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person and I do not like to make new friends I feel uncomfortable and shy

while

they

stayed

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room

. In the

last

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I request you to kindly look at my problem and I

suggested

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to to

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change my

room

. If possible please

allot

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allow

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single

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room

so that I can prepare for my exams and feel comfortable. Looking forward to hearing a positive and prompt response from your side. Yours faithfully, Navdeep

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single idea per paragraph

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coherence cohesion

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complete response

Provide more details regarding the specific issues with your current situation.

greeting and closing

The greeting and closing are polite and appropriately formatted for a formal letter.

logical structure

The letter logically addresses the situation, providing both the problem and a suggested solution.

suitable writing tone

The overall tone of the letter is polite and formal, suitable for addressing an official.

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Word repetition
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

162 words

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