The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The two charts illustrate the
percentage
of employed males and
famales
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females
aged from 60 to 64 in four different countries (Japan, the
USA
, Belgium and
Australia
) in two different years 1970 and 2000.
Overall
,
men
had
significantly
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higher
percentage
of employment than
women
. It is clear from the first bar charts that in 1970,
men
had
higher
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percentage
of employment than in the
year
2000.
However
, in the
USA
and
Australia
, more
women
were employed in 2000 than in 1970.
According to
the first bar chart, in Belgium, only 79% of
men
were employed in 1970.
However
, in 2000,
this
percentage
experienced a significant decline, which was only 19%. In
Australia
, 76% of
men
were employed in 1970, and in the
year
2000, it reduced and 47% of
men
were employed. In the second bar chart, in the
USA
, 36% of
women
had employment in the
year
1970, and it slightly increased in the
year
2000, which was 39%.
Similarly
, in
Australia
, in 1970, 16% of females were employed and in 2000, it slightly increased and showed 18% of
women
were employed.
However
, In the
USA
, 36% of females were employed in 1970, and in the
year
2000,
in
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it
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increased and 39% of
women
were employed.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, usa, australia, men, women, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment rate
  • Percentage
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Fluctuation
  • Gender disparity
  • Trend
  • Decline
  • Improvement
  • Variation
  • Noteworthy
  • Aligned
  • Comparative analysis
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