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The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The two charts illustrate the
percentage
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 of employed males and
famales
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females
 aged from 60 to 64 in four different countries (Japan, the
USA
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, Belgium and
Australia
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) in two different years 1970 and 2000.
Overall
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,
men
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 had
significantly
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a significantly
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 higher
percentage
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 of employment than
women
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. It is clear from the first bar charts that in 1970,
men
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 had
higher
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percentage
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 of employment than in the
year
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 2000.
However
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, in the
USA
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 and
Australia
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, more
women
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 were employed in 2000 than in 1970.
According to
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 the first bar chart, in Belgium, only 79% of
men
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 were employed in 1970.
However
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, in 2000,
this
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percentage
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 experienced a significant decline, which was only 19%. In
Australia
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, 76% of
men
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 were employed in 1970, and in the
year
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 2000, it reduced and 47% of
men
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 were employed. In the second bar chart, in the
USA
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, 36% of
women
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 had employment in the
year
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 1970, and it slightly increased in the
year
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 2000, which was 39%.
Similarly
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, in
Australia
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, in 1970, 16% of females were employed and in 2000, it slightly increased and showed 18% of
women
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 were employed.
However
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, In the
USA
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, 36% of females were employed in 1970, and in the
year
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 2000,
in
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it
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 increased and 39% of
women
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 were employed.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, usa, australia, men, women, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment rate
  • Percentage
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Fluctuation
  • Gender disparity
  • Trend
  • Decline
  • Improvement
  • Variation
  • Noteworthy
  • Aligned
  • Comparative analysis
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