The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.
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The pie chart compares different kinds of
energy
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construction in France in 1995 and 2005.
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,
it is clear that
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coal was the most produced
energy
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in both years,
whereas
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the opposite was true for other energies, with the lowest
production
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in 1995 and 2005 . The first popular
energy
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production
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was coal . In 1995
production
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of coal was less than in 2005, 29.80% and 30,93%, respectively. The second
energy
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with high
production
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was gas. In 1995 gas
production
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was 29.63%,
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in 2005 was 30.31%. The third
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with more
production
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was
petro
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. Petrol
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in 1995 was more than it produced in 2005, 29.27% and 19.55%. The fourth
energy
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with more
production
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was nuclear. Nuclear
production
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in 1995 was less than in 2005. Nuclear
production
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was 6.40% in 1995,
whereas
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in 2005 was 10.10%.
Finally
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, the
last
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energy
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is other energies. In 1995 other
energy
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production
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was less than in 2005, 4.90% and 9.10%, respectively.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, production with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nuclear energy
  • Renewable energy
  • Non-renewable energy
  • Technological advancements
  • Government policy
  • Environmental policies
  • Investment in renewable technologies
  • Traditional energy sources
  • Coal usage
  • Natural gas
  • Environmental regulations
  • Energy consumption
  • Energy production levels
  • Proportion
  • Broader trends
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