The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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illustrate
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the
conumption
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consumption
of chicken and
differnt
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different
types of
meat
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in
europe
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Europe
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countries between 1979 and 2004. The
unites
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are measured in
grams
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per
person
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per week.
Overall
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,
its
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clear to say that chickens are elevated strongly increased.
However
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, the other three
soureces
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sources
of
meat
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have decreased
respectivly
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respectively
. Based on what
it
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is
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shown in the graph, in 1979
people
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consumed around 150
grams
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per
person
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, but
then
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it's
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it
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dramatically
inreased
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increased
until 1994, and
then
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it reached
it
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peak in 2004 by nearly 250
grams
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.
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hand
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humens
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humans
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also
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consumed 220
grams
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of beef in 1979
then
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it suddenly
decresed
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decreased
in the early 80s but
at the end
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of
80s
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people
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have
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consumed more so the percentage went up at the time.
However
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, it didn't
last
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long so it went deep down to 100
grams
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per
person
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in 2004. In terms of
lamb
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and fish, in 1979
people
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consumed 150
grams
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of
lamb
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in addition
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they have consumed nearly 60
grams
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of fish,
According to
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what it
shown
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,
for
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over
the
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apply
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time. the line graph for fish consumption
its
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is
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basically
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fluctuation
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therefore
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, it remains the same until 2004. unlike
lamb
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, in 1982 it dropped to 120
grams
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per
person
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, and
then
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it got a minor growth
at the end
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of
80s
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the 80s
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furthermore
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,
people
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tend to rely more on other sources of
meat
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which led
people
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to
cosume
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consume
less
of
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apply
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lamb
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meat
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.
Moreover
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,
lamb
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consumption
have
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has
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downturn to 60
grams
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in 2004.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words meat, grams, person, people, lamb with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • trend
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • plummet
  • soar
  • steady
  • exponential
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • food industry
  • innovation
  • cultural shift
  • economic conditions
  • demographic changes
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