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The bar chart and table show information about the average daily use and the cost of domestic water in five countries Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The bar chart and table show information about the average daily use and the cost of domestic water in five countries Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
#bar #show #information #cost #water #five #countries #summarise #features #comparison
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the graphs illustrate information about
medium
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the medium
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 use of domestic
water
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 per day and
fee
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a fee
the fee
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of
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for
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this
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water
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 in five countries.
Overall
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, the most noticeable is, in Australia the
most
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apply
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highest cost of the
water
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 per year in Perth city. The most part of the domestic
water
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 goes to the agriculture. In
the
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apply
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Sydney annual consumption of
water
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 is approximately 200
kilolitres
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. Adelaida
city
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city's
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 usage of
water
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almost
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is almost
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 225
kilolitres
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that
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apply
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higher
25
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than 25
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kilolitres
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than
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in
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the
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apply
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Sydney. In comparison, the Canberra shows the lowest level of
kiloletre
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kilolitre
kilometre
kilometres
 of
water
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, 130
kilolitres
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.
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, in
pie
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the pie
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 chart seen that the
most
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apply
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highest
percent
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 is 76% which is used in agriculture. After that comes
household
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households
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 with 9
percent
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per cent
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 of usage. In comparison
water
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 supply, sewage and drainage and electricity with gas supply have
same
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the same
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 amount of
percent
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per cent
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, kilolitres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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