You and a friend have both been accepted to a study abroad program in Paris, France. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: -Congratulate him/her for also being accepted. -Ask him/her if he/she would like to be your roommate. -Discuss possible activities that the two of you could do together.
Dear Abc
I hope you are doing well and I am glad to hear that your enrollment
have
been accepted by the university in Paris. Actually, I was worried Change the verb form
has
about
that you did not receive any message from Change preposition
apply
university
side but before starting Correct article usage
the university
of
our course, we received Change preposition
apply
this
Correct pronoun usage
apply
such
a
big good news.
We Correct article usage
apply
are
always good friends Verb problem
have
from
grade 5th because we have Change preposition
since
done study
together and now we are going Wrong verb form
studied
Change preposition
to paris
paris
for Change the capitalization
Paris
our
Correct pronoun usage
apply
further
study
Fix the agreement mistake
studies
with
the same program Change preposition
in
as well as
we know each other in good
way. So, it is good for us if we Change the article
a good
will
live together over Verb problem
apply
therefore
become a roommate because we know each other preferences.
Moreover
, it is very difficult to live alone in different
country so, we will live together and will Add an article
a different
do
help each other in Unnecessary verb
apply
academic
because we have Fix the agreement mistake
academics
same
course Change the article
the same
as well
as
we will Correct word choice
and
do
work together Unnecessary verb
apply
of
household choresChange preposition
on
.
I am looking forward to hearing from you!
Best Regards,
PreetRephrase
together.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Try to separate each main idea into its own paragraph for clarity. This will help the reader follow your thoughts more easily.
Task Achievement
Make sure to proofread your letter to correct any grammatical errors, especially focusing on subject-verb agreement and article usage.
Task Achievement
The letter clearly addresses all parts of the task: congratulating the friend, suggesting living arrangements, and discussing activities.
Task Achievement
The tone of the letter is friendly and appropriate for writing to a friend.
Coherence and Cohesion
The opening and closing of the letter are appropriate and polite, which creates a nice structure for a friendly letter.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite