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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The provided line graph illustrates the amount of
books
were
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borrowed from four village libraries in four months(June, July, August,
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and Spetember
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Spetember
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September
)in 2014,
while
pie
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the pie
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 chart depicts the five types of
books
were
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that were
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 read by people
in
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at
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 the same time.
Overall
, the trend of
brrowing
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borrowing
books
 in Ryesip declined dramatically. The book reading rate increased slowly in both
west
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 Eaton
,
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 and Church Mount villages.
Additionally
, the trend of
sutton
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 wood fluctuated but
setteled
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settled
 slightly above
at the end
. The highest number of people like to read Fiction
books
,
while
 the lowest number of
reades
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readers
reads
 prefer Biography. When considering Rayslip village, 300 individuals took
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the book
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book
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books
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 from
library
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the library
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 but the rate
was
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decreased to reach its lowest in September which was around 175.
In contrast
, readers from West Eaton, and Church Mount
brrowed
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borrowed
 50
books
 in June but their interest rose steadily and reached its maximum in September. The villages from Sutton Wood had their least interest
to read
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in reading
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the
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books
 in August around 100
books
 but the trend
up
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surged
drammatically
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dramatically
 to catch in
top
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 to 300 in September.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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