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You and a friend have both been accepted to a study abroad program in Paris, France. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: -Congratulate him/her for also being accepted. -Ask him/her if he/she would like to be your roommate. -Discuss possible activities that the two of you could do together.

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Dear Sam, I hope you are doing well and are in the best spirits. I am glad to know that your application
is
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 approved for doing
course
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a course
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 in your dream country in Paris, France. I am writing
this
 letter to congratulate you
for
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 the successful submission of your application in that nation. And it would be great for us if we decide to manage things together. I am really happy
for
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 the selection of your application
in
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Hotel
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 Management course in the same college where I will meet you in
few
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a few
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 months
there
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. As you know, we have to find a room to stay
over
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in over
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 there and we know each
others
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 very well, even since
from
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our childhood we
were
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 like best friends. What
you
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do you
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 think if we will find a
share
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 room for us?. It will
ease for
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 us to get familiar with the norms and traditions of
new
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the new
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 country. We both have the same course and we can do our assignments collectively by
doing
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having
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discussion
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 with each other.
Also
, I am thinking
to distribute
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of distributing
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 our household chores to
happen
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 any kind of conflict in future. I think you will find
this
 information useful. I am looking forward
for
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 your reply as soon as possible! Warm Regards, Savvy.
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coherence cohesion
Try to improve the logical flow between sentences for a more cohesive text. For example, include linking words or phrases to smoothly lead from one idea to another.
task achievement
Ensure all parts of the task are addressed comprehensively. You could elaborate more on activities you can do together, such as exploring famous sites or participating in cultural events.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing parts are handled well, maintaining a friendly and appropriate tone throughout the letter.
task achievement
The letter's tone is warm and enthusiastic, which suits the context of writing to a friend.
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