The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009.
The charts illustrate the
electricity
generation
in 2009 by France
and Germany
, measured in a billion kWh. Generally, it is evident that while
the main electricity
resource of Germany
is conventional thermal, France
mostly uses nuclear.
Overall
, the generation
capacity in Germany
is equal to 560 billion kWh, and 59.6Change the spelling
per cent
percent
of bulk is conventional thermal, while
the nuclear and renewable are identical to 23 and 17.4Change the spelling
per cent
percent
respectively. According to
the second chart of renewable generation
types, biomass, and wind energy
are the most usable directions,39.3 and 36.9Change the spelling
per cent
percent
, while
the hydro electrical
type has an average usage and solar Correct your spelling
hydroelectrical
energy
gaining way is not being developed anyhow.
Moving on to statistics of France
, Nuclear energy
consists three fourth
of the Correct your spelling
three-fourths
overall
mass of electricity
. In comparison with German statistics, conventional thermal type is far less developed in France
10.3Change the spelling
per cent
percent
, and renewables are closely the same average. The second pie chart of France
shows the most usable types of renewable energy
, and the most developed one is hydroelectric, which is equal to 80.5Change the spelling
per cent
percent
, and in contrast
to Germany
, France
uses solar types of electricity
generation
.
In conclusion, both countries are being developed in their own way, and differ from each other.Submitted by moon2014angel on
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