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The graphs below show the number of medals won by the top five countries in the summer and winter Olympics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the number of medals won by the top five countries in the summer and winter Olympics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two bar graphs compare the number of
medals
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 achieved by the five highest
countries
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 in the Summer and
Winter
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Olympics
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. In the
Winter
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Olympics
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, the
position
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 of the highest medal winner was held by Norway, with approximately 370
medals
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, one-third of them being gold. The rank was followed by the United
States
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,
Germany
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,
Russia
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, and Canada, at 310, 240, 180, and 190
medals
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, respectively.
While
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, in total,
Russia
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 held fewer
medals
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 compared to Canada, it managed to achieve the fourth
position
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 because it acquired more gold
medals
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. These ranks changed significantly in the Summer
Olympics
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, where the United
States
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,
Russia
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, and
Germany
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 were the only three
countries
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 that still remained on the podium compared to the
Winter
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Olympics
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.
This
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 time, the United
States
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 was successful in taking the first
position
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 with 2500
medals
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, which is followed by
Russia
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,
Germany
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, Great Britain, and France in the second to
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fifth
position
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, respectively. In conclusion, the
countries
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 that stood as the top five medal winners fluctuated a lot in the Summer
Olympics
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 compared to the
Winter
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Olympics
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, where the United
States
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,
Russia
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, and
Germany
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 were the only three
countries
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 that remained in the top five.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words medals, countries, winter, olympics, position, states, germany, russia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • medal tally
  • top-performing countries
  • notable differences
  • highlight trends
  • summer vs. winter Olympics
  • significant differences
  • overall performance
  • comparative analysis
  • dominance in events
  • athletic prowess
  • statistical comparison
  • consistency in winning
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