The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The static chart below illustrates the subject and gender,
as well as
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the percentage of
students
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, who passed their high school competency
exams
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in 2010 and 2011.
Overall
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, the given data provides information about the amount of
students
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who passed high school
exams
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during 2010-2011, by gender and subject.
Furthermore
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, the chart shows that the highest
number
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of
graduates
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were from Computer Science and Mathematics fields, and the lowest was from Chemistry and History
exams
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.
Firstly
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, female
students
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passing high school tests were higher than boys in every study field except Geography.
In addition
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, Computer Science
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Mathematics, and foreign languages had high numbers of
graduates
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where female
students
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' percentage was around 50%.
Also
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, in Chemistry girl
graduates
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proportion was marginally high with 30.2% compared to boys, where their
number
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was 14.1%.
However
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, in Geography studies girls'
graduates
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'
number
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was only 20.2%,
while
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male
students
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' percentage was 30.4%.
Moreover
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,
according to
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given data, in foreign languages and Mathematics, male
students
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' numbers were approximately the same, around 50%.
As well as
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in Physics studies, the gender balance was maintained, but the general
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students
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student's
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number
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, who passed their
exams
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was slightly low, where girls held 33.1% and boys had graduated. Taking everything into consideration, from the provided data picture, we can draw a conclusion that Computer Science and foreign languages were popular among both genders,
while
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Geography had more boy
students
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and Chemistry had more female
graduates
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in 2010-2011.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as, while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, exams, number, graduates with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Competency exams
  • High school
  • Pass rate
  • Disparity
  • Performance gap
  • Subject-specific analysis
  • Year-to-year progression
  • Regression
  • Overall trends
  • Significant
  • Notably wide/narrow
  • Conclusion
  • Observations
  • Consistencies
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