The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
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The chart given presents the percentage of regular physical exercises that were done by Australian men and women of different ages in 2010. There is a link in the graph, but it is not consistent. More than 40
percent
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of females aged 15 to 24 do
regular
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activity, and
this
number keeps on rising and reaches above 50
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in the
age
35 to 64, and
then
it decreases to approximately 47
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in the
age
over 64. For the male, it can be seen that there is a downline in the
age
of 15 to 64, from above 50
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to approximately 49
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,
then
it is followed by an upline from the
age
of 45 to above 64 in the number above 40
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.
Overall
, we can see the correlation between the two lines that as the number
females
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increases, the males decrease, and vice versa, but there is an inconsistency in the
age
of 45 to 54 where the two of them rise together.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent, age with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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