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Band 5

You recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phoned the shop but no action was taken. Write a letter to the shop manager. In your letter: • describe the problem with the equipment • explain what happened when you phoned the shop • say what you would like the manager to do Task 1 (general)

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Respected Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you, that today in the morning at '9am' I came to your
well renowned
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well-renowned
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 kitchen named by 'Kitchen
accessories
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Accessories
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'.
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However
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However,
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 I got myself a black sleek
looking
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apply
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coffee
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 maker, costing me , 900 dollars. I was very excited to use it, placed it close to my stove,
I
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read the manual carefully and followed all instructions, precisely.Without waiting I placed my
coffee
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 to get
brew
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a brew
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. On the
manual
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manual,
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 it said it
will
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 take only 2 minutes, but as 10 seconds passed, my
coffee
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 lid broke,
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furthermore
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furthermore,
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 it stopped working. After experiencing
such
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 a horrible incident, I instantly called your shop, almost
for
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five times and I came to the conclusion that your customer care service needs improvement because no one
responding
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 and they had no idea what to do. I am so much disappointed and writing
this
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 letter. I confirmed on the manual that it has a
2 year
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2-year
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 warranty, so I am coming back tomorrow. I need
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the manger
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manger
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manager
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 to get me a perfect
coffee
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 machine, by tomorrow . I paid through PayPal and if I don't get a new one I am gonna plaint on PayPal customer support . I hope
this
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 is
a
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the
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 right thing to do. Thanks
Your
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Yours
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 faithfully Umar

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single idea per paragraph
Ensure the letter is divided into clear paragraphs, each presenting a single idea to enhance readability.
suitable writing tone
Maintain a formal yet courteous tone throughout the letter, especially when addressing the issue.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriate for a formal letter.
complete response
The letter effectively describes the problem with the equipment and provides specific details, such as the brand and cost.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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