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The table shows average calorie intake in the United States over a period of time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows average calorie intake in the United States over a period of time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Average
calorie
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 intake in the United States is demonstrated for special
years
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 by table.
Firstly
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, grains had
big
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a big
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 increasing rating over a period of
years
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. In 1970,
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the
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values of
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the calorie
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calorie
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calories
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of
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for
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 these products were 430 and
this
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 number escalated
575
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to 575
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 in 1990, peaked 625 after 20
years
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. But
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the stiutation
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stiutation
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situation
 in
diary
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the diary
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 was
diffirent
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different
, so it lost minimal points across
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years
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the years
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.
On the other hand
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, there is the biggest change happened
at
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with
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 added fat. Its score was 460 in 1990 and
rised
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raised
rose
 150 points
that
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which
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 indicated 640
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calorie
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calories
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 in 2010. Opposite
this
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 fact, the most
signficate
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significant
 fall took place in
diary
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the diary
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 and
this
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 was 5. In the table, the highest
calorie
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 intakes were recorded in added fat and grains had got the second place. There was
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a stabil
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stabil
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stable
 stand in fruit. Its score increased
only
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to only
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 15 and one time in 1990.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words calorie, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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