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The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors' contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors' contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the changes in the percentages of industry sectors
a
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contribution to the economy of Turkey
at
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 eight
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sector
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 in two
difference
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 years.
Overall
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, agriculture constituted the main
sector
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 at the beginning
in
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 the first year,
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 healthcare and education
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 the main
sector
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 in the second year.
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, construction was the least
sector
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 in 2000,
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 in 2016, the least
sector
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 was government. With regards to the contribution from construction, it increased by 7% from a mere 3% in 2000 to 10% in 2016.
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, in the case of manufacturing, it went up from 8% in 2000 to 12% in 2016.
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, trade, Utilities and transportation rose by 2% and finance, Business and others
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 increased by 8%.
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, it can be clearly seen that agriculture decreased by 10% from a mere 24% in 2000 to 14% in 2016. In terms of leisure and hospitality
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 government, they dropped by a mere 3%. When comes to healthcare and education, it can be noted that it did not change in
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both years.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sector with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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