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The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors' contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016.

The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors' contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016.
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It is thought by some that it is impossible for
human
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the human
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 workforce to
complete
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compete
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 with AL in the future. In my opinion, I completely disagree that
al
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all
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 can do human jobs . I believe that some jobs still require humans .
Firstly
,
robots
unable
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are unable
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 to communicate with others.
In other words
, communicating with other persons is a special ability of humans
robots
 can not communicate with each other
as well as
 with individuals.
Which lack
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 of communication may lead to many issues .
For example
 ,
being
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a teacher needs to have many skills one of
that
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those
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skill
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skills
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 is that strong bond with their
students
 to help them
and
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give them
advices
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advice
pieces of advice
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 and guide them to follow their dreams
that
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which
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 will help
students
 to improve. If
robots
 teach children
this
 leads to many consequences. Another point to consider is that humans can
handling
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 the different challenges they are faced .
That is
 to say, people always
faced
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 many challenges in their
life
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lives
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If they have problems, they try in every way to solve them that cannot be replicated by a machine.
For instance
 , a teacher teaching a class with more than twenty
students
 will need to understand their needs and methods so that all of them can understand the classes.
Thus
 , it is difficult for
robots
 to
makes
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 all the
students
 understand all classes .
To sum up
, I believe that
robots
is
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are
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 limited and they never be able to do all kinds of careers which individuals do. I think AL will play a supportive role rather than a replacement.Al has many differences
to
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 the real one . There are always jobs for people.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words robots, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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