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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart depicts how electricity is produced in a hydroelectric power station. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent, that the process is divided into two stages. There are considerable differences in
water
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circle
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 for day and nighttime. The
water
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 stream
initially
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 generates the energy during the
day
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time
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 in the sophisticated tool which has the reverse process of pushing the flow of the liquid by the pump at night
time
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 with, the
water
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 from the river wends to the high-level reservoir backed up by a dam.
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 the
day
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daytime
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time
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 the
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 flows by the pipe to the power station the generator section. The generator works with the help of the power lines and the national grid. The reversible turbines push the
water
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 in daytime in the generator after it flows to the low-level reservoir,
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 at night
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 the system works in the opposite direction. The mechanism pumps
water
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 backwards into the high-level container and the flow of the
water
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 returns back again
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 the high-level reservoir.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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