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A bar chart shows the percentage of men and women in Great Britain who had driving licenses and another bar chart shows the percentage of men and women who applied for driving licenses at the age of 17-20. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

A bar chart shows the percentage of men and women in Great Britain who had driving licenses and another bar chart shows the percentage of men and women who applied for driving licenses at the age of 17-20. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The left bar chart illustrates information about how many males and females have had driving certificates throughout the timetable, and the right one depicts the gender distribution of drivers between 17 years old and 20 years old in 1996 and 2006.
Overall
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, what stands out from the bars is that both
groups
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' percentages have increased,
while
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 licenses obtained by
men
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 tend to be more than
women
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.
However
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, the figure for adolescents in both gender
groups
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 declined. In detail, in 1976, 70% of
men
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 had driving licenses,
whereas
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 the
women
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's share was 30%, recording less than 40% compared to
men
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. During the period, the statistics related to male individuals increased marginally to 80% in 2006.
However
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, the figure regarding
women
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 experienced remarkable growth and doubled
at the end
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 of the period, levelling up to 60% in 2006. Even though the number of
women
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 exceeded over time, it did not surpass the number of
men
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 with driving certificates. Regarding the other bar, in young
men
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groups
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, only 50% of them participated in obtaining the related certificate in 1996. Meanwhile, in 2006, the trend dropped slightly by around 5%, reaching 45%.
However
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, the figure for young
women
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 was 30% in 1996 and
also
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 decreased to 20% in 2006. Both gender
groups
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 levelled off gradually during the period, but the
women
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's share downfall was bigger than
men
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's.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words groups, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • percentage
  • trend
  • highlight
  • period
  • comparison
  • driving license
  • applicants
  • age group
  • gender difference
  • trend analysis
  • significant differences
  • apply for a license
  • relation
  • overall
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