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A bar chart shows the percentage of men and women in Great Britain who had driving licenses and another bar chart shows the percentage of men and women who applied for driving licenses at the age of 17-20. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

A bar chart shows the percentage of men and women in Great Britain who had driving licenses and another bar chart shows the percentage of men and women who applied for driving licenses at the age of 17-20. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar charts illustrate the proportion of
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 with driving licenses in total and the
amount
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number
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 of men and women who applied for
the
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apply
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licenses
at
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in
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 the age group of 17 to 20 in Britain from 1976 to 2006.
Overall
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, from the given stat, we can understand that more men had
the
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a
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 driving license as
compare
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compared
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 to women in all the
years
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.
Moreover
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, the amount of both
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 who applied for driving licenses significantly increased over the period of 30
years
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.
However
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, the percentage of both young
drivers
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 aged between 17 to 20
years
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 showed a slight dip from 1996 to 2006.
According to
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 the data, the percentage of men with
license
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licenses
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 increased by 10% over the
years
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 with the lowest of 70% in 1976 and
highest
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the highest
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 of 80% by 2006.
Similarly
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, the
numbers
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number
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 of female
drivers
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also
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 doubled from 30% in 1976 to 60% in 2006.
However
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, in terms of young
drivers
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 of 17 to 20
years
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, the percentage of male
drivers
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 applying for
drving
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driving
license
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licenses
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 decreased from 50% in 1996 to almost 45% in 2006. Followed by females which decreased from almost 30% to 20% over the span of 16
years
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, drivers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • percentage
  • trend
  • highlight
  • period
  • comparison
  • driving license
  • applicants
  • age group
  • gender difference
  • trend analysis
  • significant differences
  • apply for a license
  • relation
  • overall
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