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Assessing students' capability for academic success by exams is the most common method that many countries around the world. I believe that the reliance only on exams does not determine students' ability to be successful learners. Exams are assessing tools for teachers' performance, and judging students only by exams is injustice.

Assessing
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' capability for academic success by
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 is the most common method
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 many countries around the world. I believe that the reliance only on
exams
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 does not determine
students
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' ability to be successful learners.
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 are assessing tools for
teachers
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' performance, and judging
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 only by
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 is
injustice
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.
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' evaluation should based on other factors,
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 as their personalities, whether they are disciplined or not, and
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 their commitment. Depending only on
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 to predict
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’ academic success could be unfair
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 when
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 are not interested in subjects.
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 when they do not study well before
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due to
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 some circumstances,
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 as illness, so they will achieve low marks.
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, some learners feel anxious during
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, and
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 will affect their focus
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 they are studying. Unfortunately,
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 will be reflected in their results.
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,
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 are considered a standardized way to evaluate
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 themselves,
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students
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’ performance and assessing their performance level by responsible authorities. It can give a general view by counting
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 number of failed and successful
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, if the number of
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 who have achieved a high degree rose, that means
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' capability for explanation is good.
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,
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are helping
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students
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 to dry
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 in a systematic way and
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 their ideas.
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, some countries tend to exclude
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 if there is a huge number of
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 not pass
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, they assume the problem is related to
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. In conclusion, I believe that
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 are a good way to ensure the assessment of
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’ understanding, but it is not an appropriate manner to evaluate
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. There are many things that could control their educational success,
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 as personal skills.
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, governments can know teacher's efficiency by exam results.

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Task Response
Your essay presents a clear standpoint on the assessment of students through exams, arguing against exclusive reliance on them. It aligns well with the task's requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your ideas are organized methodically in paragraphs, and there is a clear introduction and conclusion. Consider adding more transitions between paragraphs to improve flow.
Task Response
Provide more concrete examples and evidence to support the claims about teachers' evaluation and the effectiveness of exams.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion which frames your argument well.
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You provide a balanced perspective by discussing both sides (students and teachers) on the issue of exam-based evaluation.
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The main points are relevant and generally well-developed, addressing the complexities of the topic.

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