In the future people may no longer be able to pay for the things the shop using cash all the payments may have to be made by card or using phone do you think this will happen one day? why do you think some people might not be happy to give up cash?
It is predicted that in the near future card or virtual
wallet
on mobile phones will be replaced by cash for shopping.I strongly agree with Fix the agreement mistake
wallets
this
mindset and i
will outline my reasons in the essay.
Paying by card and virtual phones may bring us so many significant advantages in our daily Change the capitalization
I
life
.It is safe and Fix the agreement mistake
lives
to compare
with money and it is so Change the verb form
compared
convinent
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convenient
individuals
do not have to bring their money Correct word choice
that individuals
eveywhere
.For Correct your spelling
everywhere
instace
, one of the biggest benefits of Correct your spelling
instance
that is
safety,these days we have to be aware of theft and by not using and keeping cash we can reduce its incidents.
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on
other
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the other
to
these cards may have some serious and negative Change preposition
on
impact
on Fix the agreement mistake
impacts
peoples
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people's
life
and Fix the agreement mistake
lives
also
their mindest
.One of the biggest Correct your spelling
minds
problem
is credit cards will Change to a plural noun
problems
access
people to pay more than they have and their property Verb problem
enable
as a result
they involve
with paying Wrong verb form
are involved
debt
which is not logical.Another example of Add an article
a debt
this
unsatisfactory is the countries which are not developed
as others .So in the Rephrase
as developed
future
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future,
be face
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be faced
such
as hacking bank account
.
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conclution
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conclusion
addvancement
of Correct your spelling
advancement
technology
we could not prevent Add a comma
technology,
of
these changes.With these changes not only Change preposition
apply
our
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are our
life is
more straightforward but Wrong verb form
lives
also
we could get many granted beside
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