Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believethat they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Many

university

students

have the right to choose their major, and based on their major comes the subjects that they will be studying. Many people believe that

university

students

should only study the subjects that would be useful in the future.

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in my opinion, I completely agree with that, as

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time passes, many job opportunities are not going to be as available as right now, and many majors will be taken over by technology. I would highly recommend

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university

students

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be more aware of what majors, and subjects are going to be useful in the future, rather than studying a subject that

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get them as

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goal is to get a great job with a high salary, in order to take care of themselves, and their families.

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Task Response

It would be beneficial to address both viewpoints of the task more deeply to ensure a well-rounded response.

Coherence and Cohesion

Enhance the logical structure by including clear topic sentences and supporting points with evidence or examples.

Coherence and Cohesion

Conclude the essay with a summarizing statement that reflects on the content discussed.

Task Achievement

Incorporate relevant and specific examples to strengthen the arguments and provide clarity.

Task Response

The essay presents a clear opinion regarding the necessity of studying subjects useful for the future.

Task Achievement

The argument about technology's impact on future job opportunities is relevant and adds depth to the discussion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

139 words

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