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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts how families in a nation allocated their income during
one
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a
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week
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one-week
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 period from 1968 to 2018.
Overal
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Overall
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, the expenses spent varied from
good
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goods
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, housing, etc to leisure activities. It is notable that
food
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 purchasing saw
the
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a
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 peak level in 1968,
while
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 leisure spending took the lead in 2018. In 1968, families used most of their money for
food
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, followed by the remaining categories.
While
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 35% of weekly income was prioritized for
food
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, others were just ranging from 6% to 10%, with fuel and power purchases experienced
the
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at the
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 bottom of all. In 2018, there were significant changes in how weekly income
were
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was
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 distributed. Remarkably, the families paid nearly 23% in total for
leisure
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the leisure
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 category, more than doubled to that of 50 years ago.
Food
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 purchasing,
however
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,
undergone
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has undergone
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substantial
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a substantial
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 decrease from 35% to approximately 12%.
Addtionally
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Additionally
, housing and transport expenses
also
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 witnessed whopping increases, from 10% and 8% to 18% and 14% respectively. The remaining elements saw relatively small fluctuations, with fuel and power still
remained
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remaining
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 the least
priorites
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priorities
priority
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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