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Traffic growth in the Netherlans since 1950 car, train, bicycle, other public transport.

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The line graph illustrates the growth of traffic jams by 4 categories in the Netherlands from 1950 to 2000
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, Despite, all modes of transportation starting at 0% in 1950, the gridlock for cars saw a dramatic increase throughout the years reaching its hot spot,
while
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 other means of transportation remained the same. The amount of traffic for car drivers increased to nearly 20% by 1960. After that, it even grew rapidly over 100% over the next 30 years before reaching 140% in the following years.
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, another mode of transportation experienced a slight increase over the next 5 decades of about 20% and less, since the demand for those transports was not high enough as the cars
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coherence cohesion
Include a clear conclusion to summarize the key points discussed.
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Ensure all parts of the question are fully addressed, such as trends in 'train, bicycle, other public transport'.
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Make use of more specific data and examples to support your main points.
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The essay clearly identifies the main trend of car traffic growth over the given years.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly states the focus of the essay.

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