The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
Based on the given chart, the total of spare
time
be
entertained Wrong verb form
being
according to
genders of various occupation status
is shown. Fix the agreement mistake
statuses
Overall
, retired nor jobless men
are dominates
Wrong verb form
dominate
of
having pleased to free Change preposition
apply
time
rather women
Correct word choice
than women
in
the same status. Change preposition
with
Therefore
, the rest which still in roles are having
less Wrong verb form
have
time
.
Looking at the men
graph, in a year unemployed and retired men
approximately 80 hours are taken for a
leisure Correct article usage
apply
time
. Whereas
, full
Add a hyphen
full-time
time
worker is
taking half of the Unnecessary verb
apply
time
. Moreover
, the others role
are not claimed Change to a genitive case
the role of the other
the other's role
their
free Change preposition
in their
time
.
Turning to the figures for women, every role is taking leisure time
while
the peaked stood as the same as men
is
taken by jobless and retired women either. Change the verb form
are
Meanwhile
the other fractionAdd a comma
Meanwhile,
,
is taking averagely a mere 40 to 60 of the Remove the comma
apply
time
whilst the full
Add a hyphen
full-time
time
staff is the least taking over free time
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, men with synonyms.
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