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The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel’s customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.

The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel’s customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.
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The pie chart compares the
satisfication
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satisfaction
 evaluation reported
from
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 100 guests regarding the customer
service
 of the Parkway
Hotel
in
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over the period of 5 years. It is noticeable that the
service
 of the Parkway
Hotel
 is better over the period shown, as the proportion of the 'Excellent' and 'Good' categories both witnessed a significant rise.
While
 the percentage of the 'Poor' and 'Very poor' categories
bothe
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both
 saw a considerable drop. In 2005, there were 45
people
 chose the category of 'Satisfactory', 5 years later, only 17
people
 made the same choice. The majority of
people
 felt the
hotel
's
service
 was good in 2005,
meanwhile
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 67% of customers gave
the
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positive feedback.
By contrast
, the proportion of the 'Excellent' and 'Good' categories
were
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 only 19% in total. The percentage of
'poor'
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the 'poor'
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 category chosen by guests was 12% and was half as much as the counterparts in 2005.
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 customers
felt
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who felt
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 very poor were fewer than
the
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those the
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 category of 'Poor'
both
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in both
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 2005 and 2010, there were only 4
people
 reported the
hotel
's poor
service
.
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