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The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates how
oils
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was
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 manufactured and utilized in China from 1982 and 2006.
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, the data presents an increase in production in1975 and remained stable for the whole period,
while
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 there is a
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significant
signifacnt
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significant
 increase in the consumption of
oils
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 On one hand, in 1965 the manufacturing of
oils
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has
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increased
for
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 about 3
millions
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million
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of
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barrels
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 per
day
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.
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, there is a stable production from 1975 of almost 3 million
barrels
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day
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 from 1975 up to 2010.
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,
utilization
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the utilization
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 of
oils
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 remains stable for about 2 million
of
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barrels
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 per
day
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from
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between
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 1965 and 1985.
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, there is a remarkable steady rise of
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at least
 6 million
of
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barrels
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 per
day
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 between 1965 to 2010.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words oils, barrels, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • oil production
  • oil consumption
  • gradual increase
  • surpass
  • overtake
  • reliance on imports
  • disparity
  • steady rise
  • growing gap
  • significant
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