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The graphs show the changes in the UK steel industry between 1970 and 2000. (million tonnes vs thousand). Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Value changes in UK steel industry 1970-2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs show the changes in the UK steel industry between 1970 and 2000. (million tonnes vs thousand). Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Value changes in UK steel industry 1970-2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs illustrate information about the
changes
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 in the UK steel industry
from
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between
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 1970 and 2000. The figure for
value
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changes
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given
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is given
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 in
a
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apply
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million tonnes,
while
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 the figure for employment status
are
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is
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 given in
a thousands
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thousands
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
value
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changes
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 for import
was
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downward
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 trend. The number of employment decreased significantly. Looking first at
value
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changes
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, in1970, total UK demand started at 200000 and
then
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pluged
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plugged
plunged
 to 100000 in the new year of the millennium.
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, there was a noticeable decline in UK production from above 150000 to under 100000 between 1970 and 2000.
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,
value
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changes
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import
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 began at approximately 0 before increasing significantly to around 70000 during 1970. Moving on to employment status, the majority of employees
was
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stood at 50000 in 1970 and
then
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 dropped gradually to 40000 by 1980. Following that, there was a
plumeted
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plummeted
 to 20000 and continue negligibly decreased to just lower than 20000 in 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words changes, value with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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