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The cahrt bel;ow illustrat which of three fast food restaurants were the most preffered amongst the teenagers in Vietnam and indonesia in 2017 and 2027.

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The given 4 pie charts illustrate which three fast food restaurants were the most preferred among
the
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teenagers
 in Vietnam and Indonesia in two different years 2017 and 2027.
Overall
,
McDonald'a
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McDonald
 was the most
preffered
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preferred
 restaurant among
the
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teenagers
 except for Vietnam in 2017. The popularity of Burger King among
teenagers
 of both countries in both years experienced a decrease,
while
 the popularity of KFC among both country
teenagers
 experienced an increase. In Indonesia in 2017, 60.8% of
teenagers
 preferred McDonald's, and in 2027, it decreased to 48.5%. Meanwhile, in Vietnam, in 2017, 43% of
teenagers
 preferred McDonald's
while
 in 2027, it increased to 57.4%. In 2017, Burger King, was the most preferred
resaturants
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restaurant
 among
the
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teenagers
 in
Vietnnam
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Vietnam
 as 52% of
teenagers
 preferred it,
while
 in 2027, its popularity decreased, and only 39% of
teenagers
preferrred
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preferred
prefer
 Burger King. In 2017, the preference
of
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 KFC among
the
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Vietnamese
teenagers
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 only 4%, and in 2027, it increased slightly to 6.3%.
Moreover
, in 2017, among
the
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Indonesian
teenagers
, the
pupularity
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popularity
 was 23%, and it increased dramatically to 39% in the year
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2027.
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