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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas pf the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas pf the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts demonstrate the proportion of
water
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 consumption for various purposes in 6 different regions around the
wold
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world
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.
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, with the
examption
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exception
exemption
 of north
america
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 and
europe
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Europe
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 the highest percentage of
water
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usage
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 is for
agricultare
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agriculture
 in
other
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the other
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 4 areas with more than 70%.
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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 domestic
usage
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is considere
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considere
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considered
as
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apply
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a
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the
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 lowest
percent
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percentage
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 in all areas except south
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america
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America
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.
Generaly
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Generally
General
water
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consumptoin
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consumption
of
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in
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 South East
Asia
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, Central
Asia
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 and Africa
are
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is
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 so similar, the
water
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agricultual
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agricultural
usage
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 is more than 80%.
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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 the
water
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using
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used
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 by domestic in South East
Asia
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 and Central
Asia
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 is the same and it is 7%. The highest number of
usage
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water
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 in
industial
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industry
 is for Europe and North
America
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 which is 53% and 48%.
In
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addition
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addition,
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 the domestic
usage
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 of
water
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 is
approximatly
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approximately
consider
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considered
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 the same with a little difference. In North
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America
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America,
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 it is 13% but in
Europe
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Europe,
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 it is 15%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, usage, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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