The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas pf the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts demonstrate the proportion of

water

consumption for various purposes in 6 different regions around the

wold

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world

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Overall

, with the

examption

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exception

exemption

of north

america

and

europe

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Europe

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the highest percentage of

water

usage

is for

agricultare

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agriculture

other

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the other

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4 areas with more than 70%.

Moreover

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Moreover,

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domestic

usage

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is considere

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considere

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considered

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apply

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the

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lowest

percent

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percentage

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in all areas except south

america

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America

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Generaly

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Generally

General

water

consumptoin

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consumption

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South East

Asia

, Central

Asia

and Africa

are

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so similar, the

water

agricultual

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agricultural

usage

is more than 80%.

Moreover

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the

water

using

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used

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by domestic in South East

Asia

and Central

Asia

is the same and it is 7%. The highest number of

usage

water

industial

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industry

is for Europe and North

America

which is 53% and 48%.

addition

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addition,

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the domestic

usage

water

approximatly

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approximately

consider

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considered

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the same with a little difference. In North

America

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America,

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it is 13% but in

Europe

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Europe,

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it is 15%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

148 words

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