The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in teh USA, Canada, the UK and Japan in 2009.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in teh USA, Canada, the UK and Japan in 2009.
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The given bar chart illustrates the shares of
expenses
in 4
countries
, the
USA
, the
UK
and
Canada
in 2009 in five major categories.
Overall
, the
UK
and
Canada
shared a higher amount of
expenses
for housing and food
while
the
USA
shared the highest for housing. Meanwhile,
Canada
shared the highest
expenses
for transport among all
countries
. On healthcare and clothing, all
countries
shared relatively fewer expenditures. The
USA
shared around 26% of
expenses
on housing
while
the
UK
and Japan shared roughly 24% and 23% of
expenses
respectively. Meanwhile, for food, Japan shared around 24% of
expenses
,
however
, the
USA
shared only approximately 14% of expenditures. In terms of transportation,
Canada
shared the highest
expenses
among other
countries
which was around 20%. For healthcare, the
USA
shared the highest expenditures which was around 7%, and the rest of the three
countries
shared around below 5%. In terms of clothing, the
USA
and Japan shared around
below
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5% of
expenses
while
Canada
and the
UK
shared around above 5% of
expenses
.
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