The chart below shows the percentage of household in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
The bar graph in the image
preview
the amount of people Change the verb form
previews
who's
lived in owned and rented Unnecessary verb
who
houses
between 1918 to 2011 in England and Wales.
Generally speaking, the rented accomidations
taking the highest Correct your spelling
accommodations
accommodation
persenatge
than the Correct your spelling
percentage
owend
one in early years Correct your spelling
owned
untill
1961. Correct your spelling
until
Additionally
we noticed that the owned Add a comma
Additionally,
houses
percentage
were increases
later on.
In Change the verb form
increased
details
, Fix the agreement mistake
detail
the
years between 1918 Change preposition
in the
to
1961 the Correct word choice
and
percentage
of houshold
in rented Correct your spelling
households
household
building
started Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
high
as 75% in Rephrase
as high
year
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the year
of
1918. Change preposition
apply
However
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However,
this
percentage
started to drop gradually reach to
68% in both 1939 and 1953 and Wrong verb form
reaching
to
59% in year of 1961. In comparison to the owned Change preposition
apply
accomidations
started low Correct your spelling
accommodations
as
25% in 1918 and started to gain up gradually by 10% in Change preposition
at
year
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the year
of
1939 and Change preposition
apply
stay
static till 1953 at 33% and Wrong verb form
stayed
then
increment
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the increment
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happen
happens
happedn
by almost 10% Correct your spelling
happened
at
1961
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in
Moreover
,there were
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was
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a balnced
balnced
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balanced
percentage
in 1971 at 50%. Later on from our observation that the owened
Correct your spelling
owned
houses
rate started to increase dramatically at the expense of the rented on from 1981 to 2011. Furthermore
in Add a comma
Furthermore,
1981
the Add a comma
1981,
rented
Correct quantifier usage
number of rented
houses
dropped by 20% from the owened
Correct your spelling
owned
one
. Added to that Correct pronoun usage
ones
in
1991 to 2001 the amount was nearly the same 69% Change preposition
from
almost
and Rephrase
apply
then
dropped again 65
% with Change preposition
by 65
increase
again in the rented Add an article
an increase
houses
in 2011 by 3% from 2001.Submitted by dr.wessam_jamal on
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