task 1: The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the changes which occurred. Write at least 150 words.

task 1: The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the changes which occurred.

Write at least 150 words.
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The pie chart below illustrates the main sources of
energy
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in the
USA
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in 1980 and
in
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1990.
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, the given data provides information about the percentages of
oil
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,
gas
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, coal,
hidroelectric
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hydroelectric
power
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and nuclear
power
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energy
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consumption
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in the
USA
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during 1980 and 1990.
Firstly
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, in 1980 in the
USA
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the main electric
power
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source was
oil
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and natural
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gas based
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gas-based
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energy
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, where
oil
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had 42%
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of
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usage and natural
gas
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had 26% of
consumption
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.
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addition
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addition,
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coal held third place with 22%
also
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hidroelectric
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hydroelectric
and nuclear
power
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were
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was
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5% of
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the
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main
source
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sources
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of
energy
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in the
USA
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.
Secondly
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, from the provided information, in 1990 in the
USA
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oil
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usage for
energy
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was
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marginally decreased to 33% and natural
gas
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showed
slight
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a slight
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decrease as well.
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However
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in 1990 coal
consumption
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were
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increased to 27% and nuclear
energy
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was
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doubled as well.
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Furthermore
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hidroelectric
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hydroelectric
power
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stayed stable with 5%
consumption
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. Taking
everythng
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everything
into
concideration
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consideration
, in 1990 in the
USA
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oil
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and
gas
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usage
were
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was
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lower but they still were
main
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the main
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source of
energy
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.
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hand
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hand,
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we can see that
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the
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USA
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goverment
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government
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developed nuclear
energy
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projects and in 1990 in the
USA
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its
consumtion
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consumption
were
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doubled to 10%.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, usa, oil, gas, power, consumption with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • sources of energy
  • predominant
  • renewables
  • nuclear
  • significant increases
  • significant decreases
  • technological advancements
  • policy changes
  • trends
  • overall
  • preference
  • shifts
  • implications
  • future energy landscape
  • decades
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