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Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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I do agree
to
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 the statement that
children
 brought up in poor
families
 are better prepared to deal with the
problems
 of
adult
life
 than
children
 brought up
wi
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by
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 wealthy parents.
Children
 of poor parents are prematurely exposed to the
problems
 of
adult
life
 eg.
earing
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 a timing leaming to
survive
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 on a low family income and
sacnfiong
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sacrificing
 luxuries for essential items These
children
begon
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begin
began
 to see the 'realities of
life
 in their home or Social environment. Their parent's own serve as
an
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them
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 struggles These
children
 are taught necessary skills for survival as an
adult
fran
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from
 a very early age. Many
children
 eg work
in
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 the weekends or holidays to either collect some pocket money or even
coulmhute
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soulmate
to
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their
families
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 income. A good example is many
children
 who accompany their parents
the
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to sell produce at the market. They are making a direct
Contribution
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 to their
families
 in
krims
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crimes
rims
 of
labor
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 or Incoure.
Children
 of poor
families
also
 are highly motivated. They tend to set high goals to improve their, situation." A relevant example would be Mr Bill Gates ( founder of Microsoft Corporation) He had an
imporenshed
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impoverished
 background but he used his talent and motivation to set up the
cworld's
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world's
 largest computer organisation.
However
, there are some
problems
 that
children
 from poor backgrounds do encounter. Many of these
children
 who are
robbed'
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 of their childhood
of
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while
 working, may feel cheated. They often turn to crime
This
however
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, is a Small
group
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 In backgrounds summing up, are able
children
 with
imporenshed
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impoverished
 deal with
problems
 of
adult
life
 because of early exposure, family role
modets
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models
 and sheer motivation.
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