In many countries, senior positions have higher salaries compared to those of young workers of the same company. Some people think this isn’t justified. Do you agree or disagree?
In many countries, high
positions
get well-paid salaries contrast
to young workers Change preposition
in contrast
that
Correct word choice
apply
they
Correct pronoun usage
who
work
the same company. Add the preposition
work for
Seniors
Fix the agreement mistake
Senior
positions
have many important duties and responsibilities than young workers as well as
experience. This
essay agrees
Add the preposition
agrees on
agrees to
agrees with
this
opinion.
To begin
with, companies
require vital tasks from mangers
and directors Correct your spelling
managers
that
these tasks bring huge responsibilities. Some of them are making decisions Correct word choice
and
behalf
company, participating Change preposition
on behalf
Change preposition
in meeting
meeting
, Fix the agreement mistake
meetings
organize
Wrong verb form
organising
trainings
and others. These big tasks give Change the wording
training
pieces of training
seniors
stress and demand more strength and skills. On the other less positions
should not deal such
high jobs. Change preposition
with such
This
diffirence
must indicate incomes and Correct your spelling
difference
this
provides fair. Research
was conducted by Add an article
The research
United
Nations Correct article usage
the United
in
Change preposition
on
Canada
Replace the word
Canadian
companies
that showed impact
of salaries Add an article
the impact
about
Change preposition
on
work
quality of Correct article usage
the work
seniors
. Companies
Change preposition
In companies
which their
managers receive high Correct pronoun usage
whose
salary
, their productivity is very high.
Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
Additionally
, experience play
Change the verb form
plays
essential
role in allocating and determining salary. One of Add an article
an essential
factors
of salaries is longevity. Big firms prefer loyal employees and Add an article
the factors
a
long-term working years. Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
Thus
, a
employee works hard for Change the article
an
this
and spend
years in a company. Correct subject-verb agreement
spends
Result
of Correct article usage
The result
this
process must be fairly
. Because Managers give more success than other young Replace the adverb
fair
peoples
and Fix the agreement mistake
people
Companies
always apricate this
situation in many ways that
one of them is Correct word choice
apply
high
salary. Add an article
a high
For example
. Many firms in Japan provides
Correct subject-verb agreement
provide
addition
Replace the word
additional
wage
for their old employees.
Fix the agreement mistake
wages
To sum up
, due to
vital task
and jobs, long loyalty and experience high wages for Fix the agreement mistake
tasks
seniors
positions
are not discrimination. It prevent
Change the verb form
prevents
fair
and equality Replace the word
fairness
in
workers.Change preposition
among
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